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雅思範文及其解析2

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雅思範文及其解析2

 

在此提供一篇雅思考官對教育相關題目之9分範文及其解析:
Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on children. Do you agree or disagree?

I tend to agree that young children can be negatively affected by too much time spent on the computer every day.
This is partly because sitting in front of a screen for too long can be damaging to both the eyes and the physical posture of a young child, regardless of what they are using the computer for.
The main concern is about the type of computer activities that attract children. These are often electronic games that tend to be very intense and rather violent. The player is usually the “hero" of the game and too much exposure can encourage children to be self-centred and insensitive to others.
Even when children use a computer for other purposes, such as getting information or emailing friends, it is no substitute for human interaction. Spending time with other children and sharing experiences is an important part of a child's development that cannot be provided by a computer.
In spite of this, the obvious benefits of computer skills for young children cannot be denied. Their adult world will be changing constantly in terms of technology and the Internet is the key to all the knowledge and information available in the world today. Therefore, it is important that children learn at an early age to use the equipment with confidence as they will need these skills throughout their studies and working lives.
I think the main point is to make sure that youngchildren do not overuse computers. Parents must ensure that their children learn to enjoy other kinds of activity and not simply sit at home, learning to live in a virtual world.

解析
本篇作文為常見雅思作文類型,請考生針對命題表達同意或不同意之看法。但考生應注意,“Do you agree or disagree?”之題型,除了表達絕對同意或不同意之觀點外,亦可表達折衷之看法,並非只有絕對零或一之選擇,重點在於是否能針對自己的觀點,提出有力之支持證據或論點。
本篇範文,先針對正反兩方觀點進行分析,並於最後提出自己的立場,這也是雅思作文典型寫作方式。第一段直接陳述自己之立場,明顯為整篇作文之thesis statement,認為花費太多時間在電腦上將對孩童產生負面之影響。接下來在第二、三、四段,分別說明花太多時間在使用電腦上之負面影響,包括對眼睛(eyes)與身體姿態(physical posture)的影響、因專注於電腦遊戲而易造成孩童自我為中心(self-centered)或對他人漠不關心(insensitive)、以及減少孩童與他人面對面交流(human interaction)之機會。第五段則說明孩童較早學會電腦技能,對他們面對未來科技與資訊社會有正面影響。最後一段之結論,重述thesis statement之論點,同樣強調勿讓孩童過度使用電腦,而應鼓勵孩童享受其他形式的活動,而非讓他們沈溺於虛擬世界中。